Saturday, July 14, 2012

Untitled by anonymous

I was lucky. I could have never been saved. I was stuck in a tall tree up high in the sky. But I was lucky. My friend was not so lucky. I can still remember the day I was soaring high with him in the cool morning breeze with the birds chirping beside us.
It was at Punggol Park where I took my first flight. My hands were stretched out holding a diamond shaped piece of cloth behind my back. I started low after the launch but the wind took me higher and higher and I was soon like an eagle soaring above everything.
My friend was beside me but more majestic with two artificial butterfly wings attached to his back and two long antennae sticking out of his head. We soared gracefully and caught every one's eyes.
Then, being carried by the wind, we drifted towards the birch tree in the middle of the park but before we knew it, we were caught amongst the branches and the leaves. We waited impatiently for rescue as we tried to jiggle and wiggle out.
We tried and tried but our efforts were in vain and 'tears' started to roll down our cheeks. We panted like dogs from all the moving but I was grateful that I was not alone.
Just as we were 'sobbing', something tugged at my arm. It pulled me out as easily as ABC. Then I realised I was being saved. I was so grateful that nothing bad had happened to me. My friend was next but his arms and wings were trapped and would not budge. Then, they took a pair of shears and snipped off his arms and wings.
From then on, I realised that being pretty may not always good and I have developed a phobia of flying. But still being a kite, it is only natural that I take flight. I believe I would overcome my fear one day. Catch me flying in the sky if you are at the park or the beach.

23 comments:

  1. This story shows the point of view from the kite. OWN UP YOU ANONYMOUS

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    1. My learning was hte same too.
      This annoymous has to rememer to write his name.

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    2. It is remember spelling error.Next time check

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  2. I learnt how to do a composition as an item.

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  3. I leanrt that we should use phrases like caught everyones eye.

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  4. I learnt that we can use different points of views even an item as our main character.

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  5. Even though this composition is short, it has a lot of good phrases like "panting like a dog", "pulled me out as easily as ABC"

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  6. I learn good sentence in the story.

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  7. You have good phrases that some i never heard before.

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  8. I learnt good phrases like "panting like a dog"

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  9. I learnt good phrases like being carried by the wind ,panted like dogs, they took a pair of shears and snipped off his arms and wings.

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  10. I learnt phrases like "panting like a dog" and "caught everyones eye".

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  11. I learnt phrases like panting like a dog. After the NAPFA test , we started panting like a dog.

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  12. This compo is quite good i learnt a lot from this

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  13. GOod job anonymous! Who are you by the way? Good words and phrases used! Nice compo!

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  14. Sorry typo error there

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  15. This essay is quite good but are you mysterious.Anyway the good thing is that I have learned a new phrase.

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  16. This is a good piece of work and I learnt two words which are 'majestic' and 'phobia'.I also learnt a few more phrases.

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  17. The writer has a different way of writing.Instead of being a human being that everyone does as, he/she is a item in the story.That makes things more intresting.Lots of new word and phrases were introduced to me by the writer.

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  18. Though as easy as ABC is simple , we do not use much.The writer wrote a good example of a simple and interesting story.

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  19. I wonder who this Anonymous is.Although this is a short and simple story, there was a lot of describtion involved.I learnt"vain and "tears".

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  20. The writer wrote in a point of version of a kite . He also did it quite well . This story is simple yet good . Overall , I think that there could've been more good phrases . This can be improved but "GOOD WORK" to the Anonymous writer :)

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  21. I think the writer should put in some direct speeches to make the story better. The story line went fluently.Good work.

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