One Friday evening, I was at East Coast park to train for my imminent NAPFA test. I wanted to make my parents proud.
Jogging in front of me was a man in his forties. At first, I took very little notice of him as I was busy admiring the scenic view. There were adults and their children having picnics under the swaying coconut trees and dozens of kites dotted the evening sky.
The old man slowed down and his strides became shorter. The next moment, he was clutching his chest, the part where the heart resided. He started to stagger. Alarmed, I sprinted forward and caught the old man by his shoulders before he fell face first onto the ground.
The old man winced in immense discomfort and I saw the desperation in his eyes. I knew I had to do something or who knows what would happen to him. I made a dash to the nearby hawker centre for help.
Several seconds later, I arrived back at the place where I saw the old man. He was still clutching his heart and was muttering something under his breath that neither me nor the man who claimed to be a doctor could make out what he was saying. Soon, a crowd gathered around the old man.
One of the bystanders in the crowd exclaimed, "Someone call the ambulance!"
No one except one child around ten took an iPhone 4s and dialled the ambulance's number.
Shortly, we heard the sirens of the ambulance tearing through the air. Paramedics rushed out and carried the old man on a stretcher. The kid who called the ambulance was praised by the old man and a few paramedics.
The next day, I went to visit the old man. The doctor said that he was diagnosed with a heart attack but he would survive.
Once the old man saw me, he beamed, "Hey, kid! How can I ever repay you?"
I replied with a wide grin on my face, "You do not need to repay me but you must promise that you will pass this bit of kindness to someone else."
"Agreed!" the old man exclaimed.
As for the boy who called the ambulance, well, I saw him at East Coast Park the next day. He ran towards me, shouting,"Thanks!"
He told me that his valour had won him the kindness award by his school. I told my parents what had happened. And guess what? I did not need to make my parents proud with my NAPFA test as they were already proud of me by helping the old man.
same?
ReplyDeleteWhy you just post??
ReplyDeleteI learnt that when people are checked in a hospital are something, using "diagnosed" would be a better expression(above pointless comments ^ ^)
ReplyDeleteI learnt a new word which could be used in talking in compo: "beamed"
ReplyDeleteI learnt that I should describe about the strides and that the man was clutching over his chest before he falls down.
ReplyDeleteThe old man winced in immense discomfort and I saw the desperation in his eyes. He told me that his valour had won him the kindness award by his school.Good sentences and phrases can be learnt from the compo.
ReplyDeleteI learnt many phrases like winced in immense discomfort from Owens compo.
ReplyDeleteI learnt that we can use diagnosed other than using other words.
ReplyDeleteThe part that the jogger is going to fall down, the description is clearly shown and I don't write so clear like him.
ReplyDeleteWOW. I love the story .It is quite interesting.I like the part when it said 'he beamed'.
ReplyDeleteI learnt new words and phrases that i can use in my compo.
ReplyDeleteI learnt that i can use diagnosed which is better than using other words
ReplyDeleteI learned this phrase'winced in immense discomfort '. He winced in immensed discomfort when he suffered from asthma.
ReplyDeleteI learnt a new phrase like "winced in immense discomfort" and the word "diagnosed".
ReplyDeleteI liked the way he used phrases like 'winced in immense discomfort' & 'made a dash'.
ReplyDeleteOwen's writing is quite good and I think he had used a lot of good phrases and keep up the good work Owen strive for the better!
ReplyDeleteOwen writing is awesome.I also learned a new phrase like"winced in immense discomfort and the word "diaGnosed".
ReplyDeleteI liked Owen's writing as there is link from the start and end.I also learnt more phrases like'winced in immense discomfort'.
ReplyDeleteHe is specific in description.He also did not use commonly used words like said.Instead,he uses words like beamed,exclaimed and a few more.I could use this words to replace the most commonly word in my compo,said.
ReplyDeleteHe did used the word imminent which is good.
ReplyDeleteNew phrases used like winced in immense discomfort.Diagnosed is also used with a different meaning.
ReplyDeleteI learnt "resided" and "valour". Owen used one word that Mdm Toh had taught us.You can improve on it a little more.
ReplyDeleteThe title suits the story well . Like all other stories , the storyline is very good and flows smoothly .
ReplyDelete