SW - Carnival at Marine Primary School

Take a look at the following responses. Tell me if the pupils have got all the content points right.


Imagine that you are Jane Teo, the head prefect of Marine Primary School. Your school is organising a carnival to celebrate its 100th Anniversary.
Write a letter on behalf of the school to your ex-teacher, Madam Linda Ong, who retired last year, inviting her to the carnival.
- the purpose of writing this letter
- the venue and date of the carnival
- where she can park her car if she is driving
- two activities she can look forward to
- the location of the sale of the coupons on the day of the carnival


Pupil A's response


Dear Madam Ong
Our school is holding a carnival, celebrating 100 years of Excellence. The carnival would be held at Marine Primary School, Saturday, 3rd of March from 9.30am to 5.30pm. You will have a free parking lots if you park at the multi-storey car park near Marine Primary School. For food, you can go to the Yummy Food Street. For games, you can play the dunking machine. If you want to get a coupon, you can get it at the school's General Office. I hope to see you there.
Your sincerely
Jay Tan


Pupil B's response


Dear Madam Ong
I've not seen you for  long time! I would like to invite you to Marine Primary School's 'Carnival of the Century'. It is held on Saturday, 3rd March at 49, Marine Avenue S(654321)! The carnival starts at 9.30am and ends at 5.30pm.
If you're driving, there will be free parking lots available at the multi-storey car park near the school. You can look forward to enjoying a wide variety of delicious food a the Yummy Food Street and getting a good scare at the Haunted House!
There will be a sale of coupons on the day of the carnival at the Marine Primary School's General Office. Are you in?


Yours Truly
Jane Teo
Head Prefect of Marine Primary School