Tuesday, April 24, 2012

Presenting Sabrina's Composition (unedited) :)

  Can you help to give a suitable title?

     Birds were chirping merrily.Butterflies fluttered freely around me.Mr Sun was shining as brightly as lamp.One cool Saturday morning,I was taking a stroll along the pavement near my house.I saw a silver van speeding from far way.


     'Boom',I heard a loud crash.I looked at the place where I heard the crash coming from.The speeding silver van  I saw moments ago had accidentally hit an innocent cyclist.I dashed to the scene.The driver of the van emerged out of the van.The cyclist had bruised his arms on the rough road.


    Then,I saw the man's face.It looked familiar.It was Sally's father,Uncle Joe!Uncle Joe took the cyclist's wallet out of his pocket.He had a nasty smile on his angry face.


    'Uncle Joe'!!!I screamed."Don't steal!You are committing a crime."He looked left and right.When he saw me,he was shocked.


   'Aznil?'He asked.'What are you doing here?'He asked ,terrified.Suddenly,the cyclist moved his hand.'Help"he whimpered.Uncle Joe just stood there like a statue.I went towards the cyclist,helping him up on his feet.


   He sat on the benches near the bus stop.Uncle Joe explained what had happened.He felt bad.He told us that he got fired a week ago and his family did not know about it.We went to the clinic,Uncle Joe wheeling the bicycle.The doctor treated to the cyclist's wounds.


   The cyclist  introduced himself.His name is Mr Lee.Uncle Joe and Mr Lee exchanged name cards.Mr Lee was the CEO of  bank.Uncle Joe asked if he could loan some money from his company and Mr Lee agreed to lend him $1000.Uncle Joe promised to inform his family.They became friends.How lucky Uncle Joe was!

7 comments:

  1. I would title ist as 'A friend in need is a friend indeed'

    PS:Good job Sabrina ;)


    Alisha.M

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  2. Alisha, a friend in need is a friend in deed means that the person in trouble is a friend

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  3. I think the title could be: Forgive and Help

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  4. I think the title could be: The best day for Uncle Joe.

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  5. I think the title would be Live and let live

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